That's the main one that comes to mind. Every verse went by awfully fast, though, so I can see why you had trouble with it. And certain lines could've used more oomph!
[This is all expressed matter-of-factly. But he doesn't seem like he's really complaining.]
There are other things I could point out, too. But you're right, it wasn't bad, especially for a first-timer. It was fun to watch and listen to, which is what matters. Seeing Elan-kun express himself was well worth the price of admission, I'd say ♪ Though now I'm wondering what sort of wild nights you've had—you haven't really been staying up all night, have you? You shouldn't! That sort of thing's just awful for your health!
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That's the main one that comes to mind. Every verse went by awfully fast, though, so I can see why you had trouble with it. And certain lines could've used more oomph!
[This is all expressed matter-of-factly. But he doesn't seem like he's really complaining.]
There are other things I could point out, too. But you're right, it wasn't bad, especially for a first-timer. It was fun to watch and listen to, which is what matters. Seeing Elan-kun express himself was well worth the price of admission, I'd say ♪ Though now I'm wondering what sort of wild nights you've had—you haven't really been staying up all night, have you? You shouldn't! That sort of thing's just awful for your health!